Quote Originally Posted by Pantechnicon View Post
Come on now, everybody. Responses in the Lore forum are supposed to provide constructive criticism. Granted, hbkprm's entry doesn't give one a lot to work with in a constructive manner but I think the point is made that it's too short. Let's give the wisecracks a rest, yes?

@hbkprm: You could provide a little more detail about the Cube, such as why you had to wait and how you felt when you finally got it after the extra wait time. Try to build it up some more.
The only real criticism I have is that this needs to be about a classic system to make it into the book. I wrote mine on the Dreamcast but that was only because this forum was put up here, I never intended for my Lore story (now on Page 3) to make the book. I just figured putting mine here while this subforum was up would be a better alternative than having it get buried after 24 hours in Classic Gaming. It was a story I always wanted to share.

If he were adding to it, a good place to start would be X-Mas of 2003. Did he ask someone to get it for him? When he didn't get it, how did he feel? What gifts did he get instead? Then he could fill in the blanks from there.